Descriptive Writing

 

Hello readers,

This was the last week to finish our writing I have finished my writing in time. We were given a choice whether to write a descriptive piece of writing for a spaceship or a treehouse. I chose a treehouse please look at my story and if you have enough time to comment down below. 

Susie looked at her brother’s treehouse.   The roof was made out of hay. The walls were made out of wood and the branches were cut off. She could see sap coming down from the tree. She heard loud voices and she couldn’t identify everyone who was talking. She could smell fish and chips up from the treehouse. She could taste her saliva in her mouth. 

She heard laughing and her face went from a smile to a sad face. Her mouth was still watering, overfilling with saliva. She made such a loud gulp that her brother laughed at her. She described her brother's soul as like a thousand midnights. She heard a fizzy pop. Her face turned red, she clenched her fists and punched the tree. It had a tiny mark then it disappeared, she was so mad steam was blowing out from her ears.

 A full fizzy bottle fell down and she opened the bottle and drank it. When she was finished drinking the bottle she did a big burp and threw the bottle at her brother. Hay fell off the treehouse onto Susie and she started to sneeze.

 She coughed and sneezed, she started to itch her arms. She dusted off the hay then she threw hay on her brother. Then he started to sneeze and cough loudly. It was a disaster. Both of them were sneezing and coughing loudly. 

In the next 10 minutes they were normal again but still coughing loudly. More germs were spreading around the dusty treehouse from sneezing and coughing. In the next 30 minutes they were in the hospital coughing and sneezing very loudly. They were fine but when they got back they got in trouble!

The end!